Hi Tariq, this is looking great! Here are somethings to work on: 53-70 path of screen left hand is too straight. Arc it as it comes down, and put some more detail in how it comes to rest on his him. The hand probably needs to antic up a little bit right before the thumb rests on pants. Act this out for yourself to get the physics right. 79-124 screen right hand drifts too evenly between poses. Favor extremes, add some noise, or find other ways to break up timing. 231-259 you have one too many facial expressions at the end. Either have him look angry or casual, but not both. You can add an accent within this expression for "fired", but it should all be one attitude. Overall he looks cross-eyed. Separate the pupils more. 204-219 screen right arm looks frozen. Add some keepalive or bounce to it. 244-259 too much overlap in fingers of cigarette hand. Tone this down, and add a little more motion to the arm instead. Hope this helps. Happy New Year!
Hi Tariq, this is looking great! Here are somethings to work on:
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79-124 screen right hand drifts too evenly between poses. Favor extremes, add some noise, or find other ways to break up timing.
231-259 you have one too many facial expressions at the end. Either have him look angry or casual, but not both. You can add an accent within this expression for "fired", but it should all be one attitude.
Overall he looks cross-eyed. Separate the pupils more.
204-219 screen right arm looks frozen. Add some keepalive or bounce to it.
244-259 too much overlap in fingers of cigarette hand. Tone this down, and add a little more motion to the arm instead.
Hope this helps. Happy New Year!
Thank you so much! Happy New Year :)
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