Hi Tariq, this is coming along very well. The phrasing is nice and simple now, and it feels more authentic. I suggest keeping the girls' eyes open at the end. Also, I feel that Santa's head move when he starts to talk is a little too fast. Be careful not to let his head and body freeze once he leans forward. I have more polish notes but they can wait until Thursday. Good work!
Hi Tariq, this is coming along very well. The phrasing is nice and simple now, and it feels more authentic. I suggest keeping the girls' eyes open at the end. Also, I feel that Santa's head move when he starts to talk is a little too fast. Be careful not to let his head and body freeze once he leans forward. I have more polish notes but they can wait until Thursday. Good work!
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